23.1.08

Peer Response to Yana Hrybovska’s Definition Paragraph

Tetiana Kurtova
Group 1

     The extended definition of the “ethnographic group” is given in a simple and clear way. Therefore, it is easily to understand this term for any reader.
     First of all, the extended definition contains topic sentence, in which the topic and the controlling idea are clearly explained. Also, this sentence is placed at the beginning of the paragraph. The main idea is clear. Therefore, the writer does not need to add more details to explain it. However, in order to make the process of understanding the term more clear, it would be better for the writer to give an example of this concept. All sentences support the topic sentence. The paragraph includes enough details to explain the term “ethnographic group”. The supporting details are arranged in a logical order. The sentences flow smoothly. Concluding sentence, which closes the paragraph, is clear. In this definition paragraph concluding sentence reminds the reader of the main point restating the topic sentence in different words. As for the inconsistent pronouns, the pronoun “they” should not be mentioned. The paragraph is written without grammar mistakes. Speaking about the structure of the paragraph, the usage of transitions and short way of explaining the topic should not be omitted.
     The definition of the term is written with a simple and clear language. Thanks to the completeness and sufficiency of the “ethnographic group”, the concept which is described is easy to understand.

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