Evaluation of Lyuba Mykhaylova's Paragraph

Mariana Soroka, Group 13

Definition paragraph made by Lyuba Mykhaylova denominates the meaning of the mass society in the social philosophy. The best feature of this paragraph is the historical reference of the concept of the mass society. The format is correct. On the one hand, there is no clear topic sentence that describes philosophical concept in all possible aspects; the best sentence that illustrates clearly the concept is in the ending part of the paragraph. On the other hand, supporting sentences reflect changes and the logical order of transforming the meaning of the mass society. There is no concluding sentence and that is why the definition seems to be without an end. Despite of this, all sentences flow smoothly and give us the right direction in understanding the concept of the mass society. Still, there are no transitional signals that identify the relationship between sentences, and there are small grammar mistakes concerning articles. Generally speaking, the definition paragraph made by Lyuba is good with appropriate vocabulary and clear explanation.