Peer response to definition paragraph by Lyuba Mykhaylova

Salata Tanya, A-13

The extended definition of the “mass society” by Lyuba is logical and clear. A structure of definition is applied to rules. The topic sentence is clear and looks all-sufficient. In supporting sentences Lyuba explains a historical meaning of the term “mass society” and tells us about scientists, who created and represented sociological theory of mass society from 19th century to the present day. A contrast between different parts of society (mass and the elite) helps to understand the term clearly. Lyuba doesn’t use inconsistent pronouns. She uses a passive voice that is correct. The sentences flow smoothly. There is no concluding sentence in the definition, and maybe it would be better to write it in order to summarize.

In general, all of the sentences support the topic sentence and the controlling idea.