Peer Response to Yana Hrybovska's Definition

Kavatsyuk, Nina

The extended definition of the “ethnographic group” by Yana Hrybovska is logically structured and understandable for the reader. The definition is organized in a single paragraph without indentions, and the defined term is marked, therefore the format of the paper is correct.
The paragraph begins with the topic sentence, which gives a general definition of the “ethnographic group”. This sentence is clearly stated and contains the controlling idea, which specifies the characteristics of the ethnographic group – “whose members identify with each other and share common culture, traditions, and customs”. All the other sentences support the main idea, giving additional information about the term. These supporting sentences contain enough details to explain the term, indicating the characteristic features of the ethnographic groups. After explaining the term, the author signals the end of the paragraph with the phrase “in such a way”. The concluding sentence briefly summarizes the main point of the paragraph and restates the topic sentence.
The sentences in the paragraph flow smoothly and it is easy to read. But there are no transitional signals used, except “also” and “in such a way”. Also, the usage of the pronoun “they” in the fourth sentence is inconsistent, because it is not clear to which word it refers. Most of the sentences are well-structured, except the fifth one. To be clearer for the reader, it can be restructured in such a way – an ethnographical group is recognized by the rest of the society as a distinct group, which is its characteristic feature. As for the grammar, the paragraph is written correctly. Therefore, the extended definition of the “ethnographic group” gives the necessary information for understanding the meaning of this term and is well-structured, which makes it easy to read.