Peer response to Salata Tatyana’s definition

Daryna Vashchenko

The best features of Tetyana’s paragraph are clearness and logical structure. The format is correct. Sentence definition gives complete explanation of the meaning of the word “training” for readers even if they do not study sociology. Extended definition stars with clear topic sentence, which helps readers understand the main point: “Training is a method of psychological human’s development.” Other sentences support the topic idea, giving more information about basic features of the training. Supporting sentences contain enough details because Tetyana wrote the explanation using simple and understandable words. There is no concluding sentence. At the end Tetyana gave the list of the components of the training process. All sentences of the paragraph are united, flow smoothly and support the main point, showing different details of the training like a process, but there are no transition signals.
The paragraph is clear. There are no errors in grammar and mechanics. The only thing that needs correction is the tautology. It is better to replace the term “training” by some other words (for example, this term; it; this process).